Once upon a time there was a boy name Mubarak. He was good artist but week in study.He was getting ready for school and when he standed in street saw some problems like bagger bagging in footpath, bad people beated some one and the problem was his schoolwork because, he didn't do homework. First period was starting, Ms.Suman his English teacher said for students took out the notebook of work Mubarak said I didn't do Ms. Suman was scoding and punishing him.He became upset friends taunt him and all the period spent like this. In over the school. He was sitting in upon the playground's banyan tree.
In tree he Found a dynamic box but he got late for came back home so he putted box in bag. When he came back mother was asking about school, he didn't say something he was going in his room and thought about box. He unraped the box but nothing in it and he leaved the box.
In the Mubarak woke up in the morning and again checked in box there were lot of money 💸💰 because in yesterday thought about baggers problem after sometime he knew that magic box was working according to mind. He thought lots of things but after some time Mubarak trapped in big problem because whatever He thought it fullfil like in his mind he was beated bat people and scolded the English teacher.
The box was out of control from Mubarak. He thought about box seriously and made desigion that I will leaved the box at the same place. He did according to plan and saved from magic box.
Thank you !
By Mubarak Ali.
Mubarak Ali
ReplyDeleteNice your work. But When you have written, you should have given a little gap which you have not given.and
Do some work on your grammar.
Ok Vishal next time I will remember this that for feedback 🙏
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ReplyDeleteNice your work. But When you have written, you should have given a little gap which you have not given.and
Do some work on your grammar.
Inciting incident- 3 (you explained character but you didn't explain background)
ReplyDeleteRising action- 3 (good but not that much clear)
Climax-1. (Climax isn't clear I'm still confused)
Resolution-2 (conclusion and denouement was good but not excellent)
Ok Deepak next time I will remember this thank you for feedback 🙏
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